Frenzied by the breeze, she stood on the hill
Engulfed in her fragrance, he froze still
Clouds obscured the sun but a speck lit up her face
No roar of lightening could end his gaze
Horizon silhouetted as the sky darkened grey
She glanced at him and put his gloom at bay
He walked closer but she seemed too far
When his eyes met hers, clouds were at war
It drizzled in his heart as he touched her hand
The whole world changed like with a magic wand
His soul fluttered as her hair danced to the breeze
She smiled once and his heart was at ease
It then rained hard and rekindled the fire
In each other’s embrace they found a mire
- (c) Deepak Karamungikar
19 comments:
Amazingly beautiful, A romantic scene depicted so well...
Sahee weather ke liye sahee depiction! Subhan allah!
"when his eyes met her's, clouds were at war". athi uttam! :)
the words really hard to understand for me but i liked it
Superb. Beautiful. Romantic.
His soul fluttered as her hair danced to the breeze..I love the flutter part :)
A Complete Silence in Echoes
super saab
Amazing &superb....
like!
romantic and lovelyyy!!
What do you produce if you have "Light my Fire" for inspiration??
Silence..
- This statement is based on my own presumptions and the poet's views may differ.
Fazil
love concealed under the veil of words and the rain of simple emotions :)
*Engulfed in her fragrance, he froze still*
I can totally relate to this <3
I loved it to the T!!
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full of feel nice to read this poem
well penned :)
It's not fair to leave only one comment and forget about this... :)
Every line is magical and I would love to read this again and again...This is surely the best of your writings till date :D
The more I read this, the more and more I fall in love with both this poem and You :)
It then rained hard and rekindled the fire
This rings a naughty bell to me...Loved it!
The lines seem so beautiful and so genuine that they can bring a happy smile when heart-broken :)
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